How is this beginning to a story?

-This is my brother's. I say it's a 6.5 maybe a 7 but he says I'm just jealous and should ask my "peeps on that answer site thing." So here I am asking you.



I was being stalked. But this wasn't your ordinary stalker, if what I've heard is true. She was like any other teenage girl in mid-summer, wearing denim short-shorts, a tank top, and flip-flops. You may be thinking that it was a coincidence, maybe that she was going where I was going, but let me ask you: what destination requires you to take four rights in a row, go around one of those spinny doors six times and go back and forth between the same two subway stops four times. She was totally stalking me...i like it it

i think its a mysterious beginning

why not add a question as the last sentence, so it pulls in the reader more
I don't like it...it's boring and just a truckload of random babbling about being stalked by some girl. Make it more interesting....And I couldn't care less what she was wearing.
That is actually pretty good. It makes the reader want to know why that girl is "stalking him".
don't end the begginning with she was totally stalking me... end it more like "but why....?"
Meh. Not that good.
It could be better, but I like the idea
It's okay but your profile picture is AMAZING!!!